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THE RETURN
by John Yeo
Here we lived on this side of the lake. Even the ducks seemed to know, and would not come near. The condition we suffered caused physical disfigurement and disability. The monks who looked after Mary and I kept their distance. They insisted we pray and immerse ourselves in the water many times during the day and night to wash away our sins. Mary and I met here in the leprosarium and fell in love. Together we watched the sun rise and set over the lake many times. Our spirits return here often to immerse ourselves in memories of the past.
Copyright © Written by John Yeo, All rights reserved
Edited and revised 28/10/2014
Peace 🙂
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That was a sad one. Nicely done.
Thank you Sandra~I agree there is dignity in this sadness. I’m glad you enjoyed this ~
John, Lovely though sad story. It has a peaceful feel about it. Sad to say Leprosy still exists although there is effective treatment for it now. Well written. — Susan
Thanks for your kind remarks, Susan~ I am so happy to hear there is now a cure for this tragic disease. There has been a lot of fear and misunderstanding in the past.~
Knew where that was going, John. I must say I felt instantly saddened. A compliment to your storytelling, indeed.
I’m so pleased to read (in Suzannes’s comment) there is now an effective treatment. I can leave this sad story with hope!
Well done to you, John.
Thanks Carolyn~ I am
so grateful for your supportive remarks~ I will write bright next time 🙂
Sad but enjoyable story.
DJ
Thanks for your great response Danny ~ 🙂
A very unique love story
Sadly true Mike~~Happiness is there to be grasped under any circumstances ~ Enjoy the moment my friend 🙂
I’m glad they found one another. Too bad they were branded as “sinners.” We humans are not always kind. Well told story.
Thanks for your insightful response Alicia ~ A lot of misunderstanding and cruelty was endured in the past ~
A well written and moving story, I enjoyed the read.
Thank you very much for your response Maree~~I’m glad you enjoyed this ~~ 🙂
Dear John,
It’s sad how many were branded sinners and witches simply for being ill or having a gift. Well written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks for your welcome supportive comment, Rochelle ~Peace ~
Dear John,
This was a great story but your addition of seven superfluous commas really derails the reader’s train of thought at the station. With the possible exception of the one in the second sentence, none of the other commas are necessary. That nobody told you this should be taken as a sign of the inherent niceness of most Friday Fictioneers, but also as a sign that they are treading lightly on your work. I’m going to be the bad cop here and just split the story content away from the construction. Beautiful story, as all your readers have noted, but those commas should not be a part of it.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you Doug ~ I take your very kind comment on board, thank-you, for responding, and taking the time, to read my work. PEACE 😉
Beautiful Story John, even when ill, true love prevails. Thank you. LHN.
Thanks LHN~ I think any love and sharing is good love and sharing especially at rough periods in life~ Thanks for commenting ~ 🙂